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ladybug_tales. Over the ensuing few days, each segment will be posted to Dreamworld.
Next, to tackle the sequel. I'm looking forward to getting it in ship-shape too. In particular I'm eager to expand a summarized scene with Mr. Fuselli into a real scene.
I also need to finish and upload a couple of Monkees sketches I've been doing, both from Not Your Stepping Stone. One is Baby Face threatening Peter while Tony watches in the background. The other is Peter discovering Micky lying on the roof next to him and trying to wake him.
After reading through the fics of the timeline, particularly This Just Doesn't Seem to Be Our Day, I determined that a couple of things in Not Your Stepping Stone were off. I fixed them. Tony now directs Peter to go into the warehouse when the shooting starts for the second time in part 1, instead of ignoring him. Tony tells him the rival gang will leave him alone if he goes in there. Also, I've altered Vince's line in part 2 where he wonders if Baby Face is going to kill Peter. He still wonders, but he phrases it a bit different. This Just Doesn't Seem to Be Our Day really forced the Monkees and the mobsters to work together, and I think it would have made more of an impression on the next story in the timeline than I made it look. Plus, just in general, since I usually write Tony as a tragic character who really isn't all bad, I don't think he would have outright ignored Peter during the shooting in part 1.
ladybug_tales. Over the ensuing few days, each segment will be posted to Dreamworld.Next, to tackle the sequel. I'm looking forward to getting it in ship-shape too. In particular I'm eager to expand a summarized scene with Mr. Fuselli into a real scene.
I also need to finish and upload a couple of Monkees sketches I've been doing, both from Not Your Stepping Stone. One is Baby Face threatening Peter while Tony watches in the background. The other is Peter discovering Micky lying on the roof next to him and trying to wake him.
After reading through the fics of the timeline, particularly This Just Doesn't Seem to Be Our Day, I determined that a couple of things in Not Your Stepping Stone were off. I fixed them. Tony now directs Peter to go into the warehouse when the shooting starts for the second time in part 1, instead of ignoring him. Tony tells him the rival gang will leave him alone if he goes in there. Also, I've altered Vince's line in part 2 where he wonders if Baby Face is going to kill Peter. He still wonders, but he phrases it a bit different. This Just Doesn't Seem to Be Our Day really forced the Monkees and the mobsters to work together, and I think it would have made more of an impression on the next story in the timeline than I made it look. Plus, just in general, since I usually write Tony as a tragic character who really isn't all bad, I don't think he would have outright ignored Peter during the shooting in part 1.
