Fic problems

[ladybug_archive]

... I was originally supposed to include flashbacks in the fic about Pete Coppermine's past. But the way it's turned out, it looks like flashbacks would break the flow of conversation between him and his sister. What should I do---do the flashbacks anyway or leave it as is and have things explained in their conversation? And then do an actual flashback fic later?

And I want to keep an air of terror and suspense in the creepy stalker fic, but I don't want to kill off any canon characters. XD; Then I'd have to make the fic a timeline by itself, when I wanted it to be part of the main timeline. But I also don't think three or so almost-kills would look good. One character has already been attacked (off-screen) and is probably not hurt too badly because the creep was interrupted. I think somebody should die, but it will have to be a random OC. And then I was thinking maybe a canon character would be almost killed and laying at death's door for a while. How does that sound?

**and has done the pencil sketch of the pic where Yami Bakura is first speared.** o.o It came out really well. **will hopefully get it scanned.**

EDIT: Got it scanned. http://www.side7.com/lucky_ladybug66/gallery/

Comments

[rose-of-pollux.livejournal.com]

Hmm... since the focus seems to be on Bakura and Yami B, maybe a separate fic would work best for him... (he has his own character filter, after all).

Poor OC... ;___; So which canon character did you have in mind...?

And ooh, chilling pic. o.o Yami B's expression of utter shock drives it home... ;___;

[insaneladybug.livejournal.com]

... So where exactly did I say that was all the same fic? XD; **highly flabbergasted and shocked at the very thought and really doesn't understand.** It looks to me like I specified I was talking about two different fics. I would have to be absolutely ridiculous, to randomly insert Pete's backstory into the serial killer fic. .____.

... And the actual question I asked still stands, flashbacks for Pete's fic or no?

**shrugs.**

Thanks; the expression was definitely my favorite part. ;___;

[rose-of-pollux.livejournal.com]

Oh, oops... XD; It was just that you had posted the chapter and then this entry, and I wasn't fully awake yet, so when it said "the fic" I thought... but nevermind. XD;

I think flashbacks would work fine. ^^

Hmm... well, if you're not sure, then can I put in the suggestion of Yugi? **Yugi h/c has definite possibilities... and I'm going to see if I can work some in to the trilogy, or possibly the Reshef fic...**

;___;

[insaneladybug.livejournal.com]

Yeah, only I didn't just say "the fic"; I said something different to describe each one. XD; Ah, sleepiness.

Even if they break the flow of conversation? Or you don't think they would?

I kind of had an idea, but I don't think I want to tell anyone. Yugi, though.... Intriguing. o.o That could definitely be better than my idea.

[cskazaam.livejournal.com]

Hmmm.... That's difficult to say, but could you fit in some flashbacks some place other than in the middle of their conversation? Like at the beginning or the end? Or maybe something like, if it's meant to be a long conversation and Pete's telling her about what happened, have them sit down to start the conversation, with Pete saying something to the effect of, "Well, it goes like this...." And then have the flashback that he's telling her about. And afterwards, they could discuss whatever else they'd need to discuss after Pete tells his story. **not sure how well that fits in, though.** XD;

Sounds good to me! That's what random OCs are for, right? XD

**and leaves a comment for the pic!**

[insaneladybug.livejournal.com]

**nods.** I was thinking of doing it the way where Pete says "It was this way, etc." and cutting to the flashbacks. Doing flashbacks at the beginning or end wouldn't work for the way I wanted to do it, I don't think.... But since I've already had Pete describe things, I wonder if I really want to change his descriptions. XD; And yet I think it would sound better with flashbacks, probably....

LOL. It definitely works. I think there will be two or more real deaths, and then the horrifying shock of a canon character attacked almost to the death. o.o

X3

[cskazaam.livejournal.com]

XD Maybe you could somehow work the descriptions into the flashbacks? Either that, or just see which sounds better after you write the flashbacks....

o.o It would definitely be a shock!

[insaneladybug.livejournal.com]

XD I was wondering if I could do a voice-over like that, such as what's used in movies/TV, but I wasn't sure it would translate to a fic. Maybe I should try anyway. LOL. And I'd better get cracking, if this is going to make it for Monday's prompt....

o.o

[cskazaam.livejournal.com]

LOL. Good question! Hmmm.... Maybe it would translate better if you tried a first-person view for the flashbacks? That could be interesting. >3

[insaneladybug.livejournal.com]

Hmmmm. Yeah! Like, maybe it would start with Pete saying something to his sister, and then it would fade into an actual, narrated flashback? **has a book that does that.**

[cskazaam.livejournal.com]

**nods.** Yeah! That's what I was thinking. ^^